Sumi H. Inkblot

Please tell me you've read the Calvin and Hobbes comic. Perfect. I love it. One thing: ""Heaven's, no!"" should be "Heavens, no!". Or else it is, "Heaven is, no!" :P ...

It starts out interesting, though the language thing reminds me forcibly of the many Eragon rippoffs that I have been reading about (not on here). I like very much how ...

I like it, though I can't necessarily relate, because, being thirteen and all, never been in love. :roll: I do agree with Ofour about the "signals and signs" bit. I ...

It sounds so forced- I would suggest to drop the rhyming and work a little on the rhythm. The subject idea isn't bad at all, but if you want to ...

:lol: Haiku on Hair by Claudette. :lol: Maybe haiku humor is something I just don't get, because I grinned at it -I know several people with dreadlocks- but I didn't ...

:snorksnorkgnork: Brilliant.....:lol: :lol: :lol:

It flows very nicely, and you didn't seem to have trouble with rhyming; however. It doesn't seem like a real poem to me. I don't know how to phrase it. ...

This is a somewhat awkward chapter due to the typos and grammar errors. Run it through the spell check and it will be easier to digest. I also agree with ...

It's interesting, though I could not relate to it. Could you tell me what this type of poetry is called? I've encountered it here and there. When I finished it ...

It's pretty good for a first attempt. You might want to work on the rhythm a bit- it can change the entire feel of the poem. As for the subject ...

I didn't really understand it, but it's very interesting. Perhaps the unevenness is intended for effect, but the long lines make the others seem choppy and unfinished. I'm wondering if ...

Whoa....if you DO add a second chapter, I want to see it. While I do know the importance of emphasizing the accent in her mind, it does get kind of ...

1. Eragon or Harry (as heroes)? 2. Galbatorix or Lord Voldemort (as villains)? 3. The writing style of Christopher Paolini or J.K.Rowling (only the style, not the plot)? 4. Inheritance ...

I like it so far. The names are interesting and make you think that there's hidden depths to them. So far the only thing I would change is the last ...